Monday, May 14, 2012

Linnea's Story Proposal

Exposition: Thomas was a young boy living in England living in Nottingham. He was in his senior year finishing the last few months with high hopes of college ahead. His family was always considered of the highest class, and strictly prospetarian. He was an intelligent, honorable boy, and his future was among the brightest of the city. Everyone would always tell him he was a splendid young fellow, and any woman would be incredibly lucky to marry him, and to start a family. There was only one problem; he didn't have any feelings for girls.

 Inciting incident: The first time he noticed was when the new boy, Arthur joined the Art History honors class. The way he walked with such a strong stride, his thick auburn hair blowing in the wind, and those deep brown eyes which seemed to twinkle, especially when he smiled with those perfect tea stained teeth at Thomas. Somehow Thomas knew from the first time Arthur smiled at him, and gave him a wink, that there was some chemisty from his end too. None of his girlfriends had ever made him flush the way he did then, he knew he was in love.

 Rising action: He noticed in his church a new family, all with shining bronze hair. Among the beautiful sister and the proper parents was Arthur whose face lit up at the sight of his friend. He went to greet the family, and while the sister seemed to especially notice him, he couldn't keep his eyes off Arthur, and that beautiful tea stained smile. More and more often Arthur's sister Victoria would approach him, to simply say hello or to smile and ask for the time, or if he had seen her brother who was becoming quite close to him. And him and Arthur were going along swimmingly, as they became best mates, and study partners almost everyday. Him and Arthur both knew and could feel there was something more just dying to break lose, but because of society's pressure and the need to stay on top of the town they kept it in, and he let the rumors freely spread about him fancying Arthur's sister Victoria

Climax: One day in Arthur's dining room table, the whole family was gone and they were working on History, when Thomas decided to ask Arthur about his fancy's for any of the girls in school. Arthur admitted no he didn't feel that way toward them, and admitted he liked a "different type". Tom agreed, and when he said this he stopped, and smiled. Looking into Arthur's eyes, and those bright red, chapped lips. Without even thinking he leaned over to meet those red lips, and finally felt the passion he's been longing for ever so long. Arthur with a mirroring passion kissed back. It was all amazing, until Arthurs family with Victoria in the lead opened the living room door, agast at what they saw. They ran outside to the church, praying to god to help them, and ran to the noblemen reporting their son's forbidden love.

 Falling Action: Tom's family quickly heard, along with the city, and they became from the most respected to the newest joke and gossip of the town. With their reputation soiled, there was no other choice but to flee, to a place where they wouldn't need to suffer the ignorance and disrespect. Resolution: Come June of the year, their senior year with senior year finished, they were off to college, with the same high hopes they always had for themselves, finally free of the judgements and disgrace of the town. For as it as they were headed for a town called Berkeley, home of their college UC Berkeley. In Berkeley and the San Francisco area they found a new light of the world. Although people were not ruled by honor and riches, there was a new found happiness. IN Berkeley they found an acceptance and freedom to be who they want to be, without ignorant mental people holding them back. And everyone, even the churches welcomed them with loving open arms, as they truely deserved.

Epilogue: After they graduated and Obama passed gay mariage, they married, bought a house, and adopted two beautiful little girls, as their own family. They lived in a small house, by the San Francicso bay, and lived happily ever after.

4 comments:

  1. I like the story setting and the the story line but you need to reread it because your grammer is a little off there are three ands in one place no comas and you cant start a sentence with and.

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  3. The plot of the story is good, but its a little unclear.

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  4. I like the story line, just make sure to include more plot detail.

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