Exposition: A girl named Camilla, age 16, Lives in Berkeley California. She doesn't have the "Ideal" relationship with her parents. She feels like she can do whatever she wants, and that they cant boss her around.
Inciting Incident: She gets fed up with her parents decisions so she decides to run away, She takes her parents car and leaves down south.
Rising Action: Her parents find out and calls the cops to go search for her. Both parents are deeply worried.
Climax: They finally end up finding her in Oakland, Her car crashed into a light post she ends up being dead.
Falling Action: Parents start to call the whole family to come up north for their daughters funeral
Resolution: All family comes for the funeral end up realizing that they were so glad to have had this time with their family.
a). I liked how you mentioned the complication of a parent/child relationship.
ReplyDeleteb). It was confusing that the family wanted to be with relatives instead of a dead child.
c). These things unfortuanately happen
I like how you use a local setting.
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Your story proposal is really interesting! I think it relates to many teenagers anywhere - the whole "not having the ideal relationship with your parents" idea. One thing I think you should add is if she feels rebellious towards her parents, or if she just thinks she honestly shouldn't get bossed around? Also, does anyone know when she runs away or does she keep it a secret? Was she under the influence when she crashed into a light post? More details would be great!
ReplyDeleteI like how its about teenagers and how its setting is local. A good relatable story.
ReplyDeleteI like how this story cam relate to some of us teenagers. I think it could use a little bit more detail.
ReplyDeleteI really like the story plot because it is very unique and will be interesting.
ReplyDeleteI like the overall plot of this story. If you could go into more detail about how and why the girl has a bad relationship with her parents.
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